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Wolfsong

In the still night
In the pale moon
In the thrill of the hunt
In the heat of your room
In the love of the pack
In the sky of black
In heaven’s clutch
In your silken touch

Now the night is ours and we run free
Wont you come down and hunt with me?
Tonight we brake our mortal chains
And together we shall set the whole world aflame

And I wish this night would never end

Now run with me, silent speed
Kill clean, feel free
Forget what they want you to be
Cause when you run with the wolves
There’s just the passion to see

Now I know that nothing lasts forever still
But I know that this short moment with you will
Silent we close for the perfect kill
There has never been a sweeter pill

As beautiful as the stars
As pure as any angel
A fire in our two hearts
The wolf is yours eternal

And we live with the love of the pack
Pick us up when we fall back
And the link that calls enchants us
So we know that nothing can touch us

Can you feel the connection?
That electricity?
The bond within our little tribe
It’s the way it was meant to be

In the still night
In the pale moon
And the dreaming
And the touch of your skin
Of the seas and stars and the symphony of…
Heaven is to be with those you love
And I love you.
©2003-2010 ~icklefluffywolfy
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The freedom cry of Wolfy! w00t!

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:iconehlane:
I love the passion...the wild...the images created. F for fav! Clap

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"The past is a foreign country, they do things differently there... "
:iconblue-phoenix:
It's nice, I'll give it that, but you've got to watch your spelling. Also, you're using some words too often and although it fits the rhythm wonderfully, it just loses some of it's magic. Repitition is fine as long as it forms the basic structure of the poem (I would give you an example but it's late and I'm a lazy bum), but in this instance it's fairly random and scattered.
Another thing, as another commenter has pointed out, the flow sometimes trips over it's own feet. If you have trouble keeping rhythm, read it over and over in your mind. Drum the rhythm out on your desk. Clap your hands to the beat. Just do whatever you can to help your rhythm.
But hey, apart from that you've got some pretty serious talent here. ;) (Wink) Keep it up!

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W00t.
:icongirlunderway:
i'm a "general wolf enthusiast" you might say. :D (Big Grin)

and i love this peace. stumbled in the flow once or twice, but other than that, one of the better pieces i've seen lately. Nod

+fav

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/// yes, she really is underway.

:heart: "Some people wear their heart up on their sleeve. I wear mine underneath my right pant leg, strapped to my boot." -- Ani Difranco
:iconokami-no-oni:
great way you conveyed the feelings in that poem. now i feel like writin some new stuff, myself. i'm not sure there are enough words in the english language that describe different levels of impressment, but this deserves the best!

sadly, though, i'm a lone wolf.

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What doesn't kill you makes you stronger. And I was left on the verge of death.
:iconlilitheternity:
VERY beautiful, i love it, everything about it. its perfect. you have a lot of talent, wow, this is just fucking amazing :) (Smile)

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~...Breathing aint nothin' but something I forget to do from time to time...~
:icontyphonthedark:
Wow...Your writing is WAY out of my league to even think of critiquing...all I can say is that it's perfect, because it is...
:iconno-king-blues:

i love the warmth it conveys to me.
makes me wanna be a wolf, lol.
i gotta show this to my buddy daniel. he'll like it.

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do yourself a favor and check this cool cat out :icondannytello:
now, won't you waste your life with us?
:iconlivingpoetsociety::iconga mbitclub::iconnightmarerealm:: iconvoices-visions::iconmetroi dfan::iconindispositioned::ico nteam-naruto::iconsocal:
:iconviggo-is-my-muse:
just rereading ... Heart

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my :heart: belongs to :flagcanada:
:iconsylvansymphony:
This is great! Nice imagery and the words sre able to capture me in the wolf's feelings. ^_^
:icon6robyn9:
*growls*
Wow. Aww this is great Love You're a great writer. My be stalking you.... no axes tho ;) (Wink)

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"A Freudian slip is when you mean one thing but say your mother."

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